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Hi, read this one first and I think it does what it sets out to do. Comments are really just about moving things around for maximum clarity:
P2: Combine the 1st and 2nd paragraphs and actually start with the 2nd to get the WHAT clearer. Dropping the connected part is fine here as you do come to that later.
P2: The example of climate change feels a bit isolated (1st para) – maybe add a couple more
P3> It could be clearer if you stick to the headings in the preceding figure when introducing physical and digital twins. The data section for the physical twin may not seem logical to some with the data being discussed in more detail in the digital bit. You could also mention AI in the modelling section of the digital twin. Finally, would interventions be more logical to be discussed in the connected section that follows?
P7> Systems of systems – too many headings! I think you need different different levels of headings to make it easier to follow.